Jay’s 100 Word Challenge – Suddenly I heard a crack…

On a mysteriously, miserable foggy morning, when there was absolutely no bright and gleaming sunlight, I was lonely, while anxiously walking on the brittle, thin ice.
The smooth and gentle breeze brushed past my ears. Suddenly I heard a crack… It was as powerful as a wide and massive thunderbolt.
My frightened body suddenly splashed into freezing, blue water. The cold water sent chills up my spine. I furiously swam as powerful as only an Olympic swimmer can. I feel joyful as I swim closer to safety. Suddenly, I start to drown. I’m devastated!

By Jay

One thought on “Jay’s 100 Word Challenge – Suddenly I heard a crack…

  1. Oh my goodness, Jay. You begin with a wonderful description, creating vivid pictures in your readers’ minds, and then lead us to disaster! It certainly is an exciting and emotional ending. You have done an excellent job capturing your readers’ attention and drawing us into your story with your excellent prose. Good job.

    Barbara (Team 100WC)
    Teacher at The Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA

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