Logan’s 100 Word Challenge – Suddenly I heard a crack…

The Storm

In the blustery rainy evening, while I was happily playing inside, a terrible storm had just reached its peak with devastating gales and gigantic hailstones the size of baseballs. Ice covered the windows and the streets. Even if you wiped the window, all you could see is rain and the distant faint light of street lamps. The noise outside made by the rain was raucous. It sounded like a crazy packed crowd at an extremely close football match. Suddenly I heard a crack. I start to shiver uncontrollably and I turn pale with fear as I realise, the old massive humongous tree leaning towards our house was crashing down.

Author: Logan Flynn of 5/6 A

One thought on “Logan’s 100 Word Challenge – Suddenly I heard a crack…

  1. What a wonderful piece of writing Logan. You’ve managed to create a really vivid picture of the scene with your adventurous vocabulary choices – “blustery”, “devastating”, “raucous”. The starts of your sentences are varied which also helps to make your writing interesting. Just watch out as you sometimes slip from past tense to present tense and back again. A quick re-read would sort that out.
    Thanks for sharing this and keep up the good work.
    Mrs Boydon (Team 100WC)

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