In class we have been looking at adding more description to our writing and how to ‘show’ rather than ‘tell’.
TASK: Choose one on the sentences below and change it so that it SHOWS instead of TELLS.
I have done one as an example for you below:
Today the weather is bad.
I looked out the window. I could see icicles hanging from the trees. Wherever I look I see snow, it’s like a big white blanket. I can feel some warmth as I sit next to the heater. Today the weather is freezing cold. My fingers are so numb that I think I might turn to ice. There is nothing to do inside. Even the hot chocolate isn’t warming me up much.
~ Grandma was angry.
~ Emma was tired.
~ The dog was happy.
~ The girl wore a pretty dress.