Your task this week is to work on improving your sentences. Below I have put 3 examples of better sentences, taken from the book ‘The Fox’ by Margaret Wild! Use these sentences to create one of your own following the same structure. I have included an example of my own to help!
1. “In the evenings, when the air is creamy with blossom, Dog and Magpie relax at the mouth of the cave, enjoying each others company.”
Teacher example: Just before the sun went down at night, when the air started to lower in temperature, the chickens ran around their enclosure frantically, fighting each other for the food scraps just thrown in!”
2. “Fox scorches through woodlands, through dusty plains, through salt pans, and out into the hot red desert.”
Teacher example: Mrs Smythe weaves through the players, ducks under the arm of a player, dives onto the ball, and ends…
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In the morning, when the bright boiling sun shines, Doyle, Ben and Daniel enjoy the cold water at the pool.
Fantastic job Doyle it sounds really good.
As we play this immense game of hockey at time when the sun shins bright on top of us and you hear the crowd roaring wildly when someone on my team scores a BRILEANT GOAL.
In the scorching afternoon, when the sun was blazing, me and my brother were having a water fight in our burnt backyard.
Great job Jordan. I liked the way you added some adjectives to describe what was happening.
The enormas beautiful wave just crashed like a terrible car crash, and the sound was very loud.
As I was bellowing the people gazes At the, sunny brigbt sun
In the bright shiny morning, with the water flowing down the river, hearing birds singing around me in the hollow trees.
As my team (Glengarry Magpies) played this tough game of netball, at time when the bright sun shone directly on top of the court and all you hear were the spectators cheering wildly when our GS or GA shot an UNEXPECTED GOAL.
In the morning the alam wakes me up get ready for Football,then we live to Moe to play the (Moe Loins) so we run on the oval happy for a win.
During the bright warm afternoon, when the brown leaves fall slowly from the top of the tree, Mark and Brad rapidly sculled a 1 litre ice cold drink.
In the dull afternoon i was in a cave with Thiong there were bats so Thiong started screaming. He said I want to get out of here then he started running
I was going to kick a goal but I mist the goal I was devastated of missing the goal.
1:During the afternoon, as the sun slowly went down, as I started to pack up my school books and my stationary,I relaxed in my chair enjoying the peace of the silence.
It was the rafter non The sun was as hot as larver I went and sat near the air condition it was nice.
In the afternoon, my family comes and watch the North Melbourne Run out being confidence ready to VS Richmond for the 2014 game.